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I just finished my first screenplay... I'm so happy I have tears in my eyes. Now I wrote this for my creative writing class, hence the very few profanities.

As you're reading, think of things that could improve. It's called Untitled for now, because I don't know of a title. I'm working on that, and if you have suggestions, let me know.

And sorry that the format got screwy :/ it looks better in my computer and on paper, I promise.

Once again, I'm so fracking happy.

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Untitled
by
Mikayla Ronnow


























EXT. STORMY GRAVEYARD- DAY

A small group of people are scattered around a tombstone. We see the priest leaving as well as the people who lowered the casket into the ground. They aren’t waiting any longer. The mood is absolute sorrow. A man in a crinkled suit sniffs suddenly and wipes his eyes. This young man is ROBERT.

Another young man next to Robert grips his shoulder.

YOUNG MAN
You gonna be alright man?

ROBERT
(annoyed)
Yeah, just leave me alone.

Robert shrugs off the helpful friend, remaining reserved.

In a time lapse, we see people trickling away from the grave, but Robert stays. He’s as still as the gravestone he’s staring at. The rain heavies, and the last person finally leaves Robert standing by himself. As he’s left alone, he finally breaks into sobs.

ROBERT (V.O.)
They didn’t get it.

We cut suddenly to black. Robert’s voice continues in the darkness.

ROBERT (V.O.)
(cont.)
They all had their theories. They were all easy to believe, not very hard to fabricate.

CUT TO:

EXT. City Sidewalk

A shot of a young woman stumbling down a sidewalk, smoking a cigarette. She begins to laugh hysterically as she leans again a fence for support. She’s obviously NOT SOBER.

ROBERT (V.O.)
This was all they saw in her. They didn’t know the whole story.

CUT TO:

INT. ROBERT’S STUDIO APARTMENT- DAY

The same girl reading a thick book while sitting at a desk. She has reading glasses on, and she’s in sweats with her hair up. We suddenly see Robert come up behind her and playfully grab her from behind. He kisses her neck as she giggles.

ROBERT (V.O.)
(cont.)
All their theories were wrong.

Cut suddenly to black.

ROBERT (V.O.)
So wrong.

FADE IN:

INT. ROBERT’S STUDIO APARTMENT- DAY (DAYS LATER)

We hear a knocking on the door. We notice it’s the apartment that Robert and nameless girl had been in earlier in the flashback. The apartment isn’t nearly as clean and tidy as it had been; there are clothes thrown carelessly across the floor, and the dishes in the sink are starting to attract flies. We hear the news playing on the television. On the nightstand there are pictures scattered all over the surface of Rob and the unnamed girl.

Pan to Robert lying face down on his bed. The only sign that he’s alive is the steady movement of his back, indicating he’s breathing. He rolls over, giving us a view of his face. He’s eyes are red from crying, and his face is pale.

INT. APARTMENT HALLWAY- MOMENTS LATER

The YOUNG MAN (CHRIS) from the funeral is beginning to pound harshly on the door.

INT. ROBERT’S STUDIO APARTMENT- CONT.

Close up on Robert’s face. He stares at the ceiling.

CRHIS (O.S.)
Rob! Come open this door, or I’m going to break it down.

Robert makes no indication of moving. But he doesn’t want Chris ruining his door, seeing how he doesn’t have enough money to repair or replace it.

ROBERT
(defeated)
It’s unlocked.

INT. APARTMENT HALLWAY- CONT.

Chris jiggles the knob a few times, before we see him slump to the side. He’s beginning to become frustrated with his best friend, even if he is going through a hard time.

CHRIS
No it’s not.

INT. ROBERT’S STUDIO APARTMENT- DAY- CONT.

CHRIS (O.S.)
(cont.)
It’s actually still locked, buddy.

We see Robert, still unmoving. He really doesn’t want to have to get up.

ROBERT
Don’t you have a key or something?

CHRIS (O.S.)
(frustrated)
NO, ROB, I DO NOT HAVE A KEY!

ROBERT
Fine, fine. I’m coming.

He lugs himself up off of the bed and slowly slouches to the door. He probably hasn’t gotten out of bed in at least two days, so his movements are stiff, and his legs feel like pins and needles.

INT. APARTMENT HALLWAY- CONT

Chris is waiting patiently for Robert to finally make it to the door. He stuffs his hands in his pockets. He looks at she shoes, and the door opens.

CHRIS
(shocked/sarcastic)
You look like you got hit by a bus.

ROBERT
I did.

CHRIS
No you didn’t.

ROBERT
Yes I did--
(beat)
a metaphorical, mental bus.

INT. ROBERT’S STUDIO APARTMENT- CONT.

Chris shoves past Robert and enters the apartment.

CHRIS
That doesn’t count.

Robert turns around and stares at Chris. He’s not in the mood for him to be acting like this. He slams the door shut and walks over to the “kitchen.” He begins to pour some coffee.

Chris picks up some of the clothes laying on the floor and dump them in the untouched hamper. He bends down to pick up a plate and finds that the fork is literally stuck to the plate.

CHRIS
(disgusted)
Jesus, Rob.

Robert is beginning to obviously become angry with his friend.

CHRIS
(cont.)
Ever heard of a magical practice I like to call cleaning?

ROBERT
(tense)
Cleaning hasn’t really been on my mind lately...

He turns around with two mugs in his hand to see Chris closely examining one of the photos that are lying on the nightstand, about to pick it up. Robert almost drops the mugs.

ROBERT
(tight lipped)
Don’t you DARE touch those.

We see Chris begin to back up, raising his hands as if to surrender.

CHRIS
Don’t worry, dude. I wasn’t messing with them. I just--

ROBERT
Save it.

He hands Chris a mug of coffee, who lamely leans over to take it, trying to avoid getting close to the pictures again.

They both stand awkwardly by Robert’s bed for a while in silence, taking long unnecessary sips from their coffee. Finally Robert can’t take it anymore-- he’d rather be moping in bed.

ROBERT
Why are you here?

Chris almost looks offended.

CHRIS
You’re my best friend.

ROBERT
Yeah, so?

CHRIS
Dude, your FIANCE DIED a week ago. Nobody has been able to get in contact with you for at least four days. We didn’t know whether to give you your space or what.
(beat)
So I finally had to come and make sure you didn’t do something like kill yourself or drink yourself into a coma.

ROBERT
(closed off)
I don’t need your help.

CHRIS
I hate to break it to you, Rob, but you do.

Chris motions to the disaster of the apartment around them. Robert looks down at his coffee, not wanting to accept that fact that he might not be in control of the situation.

CHRIS (CONT)
Come on. Let’s go out and do something productive.

ROBERT
No-- no. Look, I’ll let your babysit me, or whatever. But I’m not going anywhere.

Chris raises his eyebrows, but then realizes that it’s a decent compromise.

CHRIS
Okay. Let’s order some Chinese take-out.

CUT TO:

EXT. A SNOWY PARK- DUSK

The frame is a little fuzzy, as if a DREAM. We see Robert walking with the unnamed girl. They’re smiling and laughing and holding hands. They both look extremely happy. Robert turns around to face the unnamed girl, his face suddenly serious.

ROBERT
May, I’m in complete love with you. You know that, right?

We finally have a name for the unnamed girl. MAY smilies and leans into Robert.

MAY
(still smiling)
Of course.

Robert bites his lip as he digs into his pocket. We see May’s face start to change from being completely giddy to nervous.

ROBERT
(shaky)
Well, I think I want to prove how much I really love you, and how I’ll take you for everything you are and HAVE been.

Then we see it. Robert is now down on one knee, clutching a dainty velvet box. He opens it to reveal a subtle engagement ring. May’s face goes all alight as she covers her mouth with her hand in surprise.

MAY
Oh my god.

ROBERT
May Elizabeth Goldson, will you marry me?

May’s eyes flicker back and forth between Robert and the ring multiple times before she removes her hand from her mouth to reveal she’s smiling.

MAY
(shouting)
OF COURSE!

Robert’s eyes crinkle as he smiles, and he begins to slide the ring onto May’s trembling finger. Once the ring is settled, May admires it for a moment before she falls into Robert’s awaiting arms.

ROBERT
Oh my god, I’m so glad you said yes! I can’t wait to start our life together--

He notices that May is limp in his arms.

ROBERT
(cont.)
Sweetheart, you okay?

He pulls her back to take a look at her face. Her eyes are open, but blank. She’s not breathing, either. She’s DEAD.

ROBERT
(cont.)
No, no, NO!! May, come back!

We pan out as Robert lets out a long wail.

INT. ROBERT’S STUDIO APARTMENT- DAY

Robert jolts up out of bed, gasping for breath. We see him clamp a hand over his mouth as he makes a bee-line for the bathroom and slams the door behind him. Chris, who was sitting on the couch from across the tiny apartment, watches Robert with worry. From the bathroom we hear Robert vomiting loudly.

Unsure of what else to do, Chris walks apprehensively to the bathroom door.

CHRIS
Uh, Rob? You okay in there?

ROBERT
(O.S. from the bathroom)
NO. I am not o-freaking-kay.

Chris doesn’t want to pry, but he doesn’t want Robert to hold it all in.

CHRIS
(hesitantly)
Care to share?

The bathroom door opens and we see Robert standing in the frame with a miserable expression on. He’s clutching the doorframe with white knuckles.

ROBERT
I keep dreaming about May.

CHRIS
Good or--

ROBERT
Bad. She dies in my arms every time.

CHRIS
(winces)
Robert...
(beat)
I’m so sorry.

Robert is practically looking through Chris.

ROBERT
(sighs)
I know.

INT. COFFEE SHOP- DAY- DAYS LATER

Robert waits anxiously at a table. He nervously looks around the cafe, as if waiting for someone. This is the first time he’d been out of the house since the funeral.

Enter OFFICER MANN. He has a balding head and a beer gut. Officer Mann glances around the cafe briefly before spotting Robert. He walks in a sort of waddling manner. As he nears the table he pulls out a handkerchief and wipes his face.

OFFICER MANN
Mr. Miller, I presume?

ROBERT
(relieved)
Yes, yes. That’s me.

Robert stands up to greet Officer Mann.

ROBERT
(cont.)
Please, sit.

OFFICER MANN
No sir I don’t think I will.

ROBERT
(confused)
Wait, what? I thought we were going to--

OFFICER MANN
Sorry to be blunt, Mr. Miller, but I’m tired of your crazy anecdotes about Ms. Goldson.

ROBERT
Well that’s why I wanted to talk today. About her autopsy. Has it come back yet?

OFFICER MANN
Mr. Miller in the past four days we’ve had two officers die, and a surgeon. Ms. Goldson isn’t the first person on our list. Her case is pretty much wrapped up.

ROBERT
(fuming)
You’re kidding, right? That’s so stupid!

OFFICER MANN
Son, she was found drowned in a run down hotel pool, and we have witnesses that she was seen out that night. The story is simple: you two got into a fight--

CUT TO:

INT. ROBERT’S STUDIO APARTMENT- DAY

May is screaming at Robert, who is matching her screams. We see Robert punch the wall, and May throw something at Robert’s general direction.

CUT TO:

INT. COFFEE SHOP- PRESENT

ROBERT
Stop it.

OFFICER MANN
She went out to forget about the fight, and ending up resorting to her old ways. She parties a little too hard, ends up dead with the wrong people. It happens all the time.

CUT TO:

EXT. HOTEL POOL- NIGHT

We see May floating face down in the pool, her blonde hair spread out all around her. We being to hear sirens, and soon we see flashing lights. As the brightest light flash we TRANSITION TO:

INT. COFFEE SHOP- PRESENT

ROBERT
THAT IS NOT WHAT HAPPENED.

OFFICER MANN
Look Mr. Miller, I don’t really have time for these right now.
(beat)
You could do better than some rehab street rat anyways. Do yourself a favor, and forget about her.

At that, Officer Mann walks out of the coffee shop, leaving Robert sitting in complete silence by himself. Suddenly Robert stands up next to the table, and starts trashing the table. After he’s knocked everything off of the table he overturns the chair, yelling as he does. Finally we see two cafe workers grab him by the shoulders and roughly carry him out.

EXT. OUT SIDE COFFEE SHOP- CONT.

WHUMP. They toss him on the sidewalk.

EMPLOYEE
Don’t you ever think of showing your face in this coffee shop AGAIN.

Robert scrambles up and straightens his shirt. He looks as if he’s about to say something, but thinks better of it and starts walking.

INT. ROBERT’S STUDIO APARTMENT- DAY

Robert is laying on his bed again. He’s lying face up. The pictures that had been scattered on the nightstand are now all around him on the bed. Robert closes his eyes and we CUT TO a flashback--

It’s two years earlier. There’s a knocking on Robert’s door, and we see him bop to answer the door.

ROBERT
I’m coming, just hang on a second...

Robert opens the door and we see May standing in the doorframe. Her face is solemn.

MAY
Hi, Rob.

ROBERT
(speechless)
Uh, May. Wow, how long has it been?

MAY
Like, six months.

ROBERT
(beat)
You look good.

MAY
(proud)
Yeah, I’m four months sober. I don’t think I’ve been four months sober since the sixth grade.

ROBERT
(sincere)
I’m proud of you, May. But--
(beat)
Why are you at my apartment?

May begins to fidget.

MAY
You were always such a good friend to me--

ROBERT
(begins to understand)
May, do you need a place to stay?

MAY
Maybe...

Robert seems to have some conflicted thoughts for a few beats, but then he opens the door wider.

ROBERT
Come on. Get inside.

May eagerly steps inside, as if she’s hoping to get in before Robert could change his mind. She takes a quick look around and raises her eyebrows.

MAY
Nice place.
(beat)
A little small, but okay.

ROBERT
Yeah, it’s not much of a place for privacy. And if you don’t care about bed bugs, you can sleep on the bed and I’ll sleep on the couch over there.

MAY
(smiling)
Rob, you don’t have to do that.

ROBERT
I’m a gentlemen. Being nice to ladies is in my blood.

May sets down her bag and goes to sit on the bed. She bunches the sheets in her hands before looking up at Robert. She seems to have a lot emotion in her eyes.

MAY
Thank you.

ROBERT
(beat)
You’re welcome.

CUT TO:

Robert is sitting on the bed with his head in his hands. He pulls himself up and cracks his knuckles.

CUT TO:

FLASHBACK A flash a May’s laughing face.

CUT TO:

Robert getting off the bed, looking like he has a purpose.

CUT TO:

FLASHBACK Officer Mann standing by the table.

OFFICER MANN
(echoey)
Parties a little hard, ends up dead with the wrong people... happens all the time.

CUT TO:

Robert is beginning to look angry. He yanks a shirt over his head and steps into some shoes. The phone begins to ring, but Robert ignores it-- he’s too busy concentrating on a plan forming in his head.

CHRIS
(V.O. on answering machine)
Hey, Rob. It’s, uh, me. Chris.

Robert continues to get ready.

CHRIS
(cont.)
I’m just checking on you.
(beat)
Actually, I was wondering if you’d like to go out and do something...

Robert ignores him.

CHRIS
(cont.)
Maybe we’ll catch a movie or something... Look, Rob, I know you’re there. Can you stop ignoring me and just pick up the freaking phone?

Right as Chris finishes his sentence, we see Robert rush out of the door, slamming it as he leaves.

EXT. CITY SIDEWALK- NIGHT

Robert is running down the sidewalk at full speed. You can see puffs of his breath coming from his mouth at uneven times. His eyes determined. He’s obviously on to something.

EXT. HOTEL POOL- NIGHT

Robert swings the gate open and stumbles onto a lawn chair and covers his mouth with his hand, trying to keep calm. He gazes into the middle of the pool, which is where we saw May dead earlier.

ROBERT
(shaky)
Crap...

He gets off the lawn chair and starts walking towards the gate. He thinks better of it.

ROBERT (cont.)
Okay, okay, okay. Come on, you can do this, for May’s sake.

Slowly, he turns to face the pool.

ROBERT (V.O.)
It ends here.

He walks out of the gate and notices how trampled and dead the flowers are around the fence.

WE NOW ENTER A DREAMLIKE FLASHBACK, with Robert standing in the middle of it. A bunch of drunkards are now awkwardly prancing around the gate, fumbling to get it open. One of the men are holding a small figure of a girl. May.

They tear the gate open and start walking ominously towards the pool. We hear May wailing, and Robert is becoming too disturbed for comfort.

ROBERT (V.O.)
I need to go back further.

Zoom in on dark tread marks. Robert goes out on a limb and takes the small lead. He beings to follow the tread marks that wind unsteadily on the street.

EXT. CITY STREET- NIGHT

The city is dead. Robert is following the tread marks the best that he can, but it’s becoming wishful thinking that he’s going to actually get somewhere with them.

The tread marks are beginning to fade to a point of being non-existent. Robert walks over to the sidewalk and slumps against the wall of an alley way.

ROBERT (V.O.)
I can’t give up.

Something catches his eye. Something sparkling. A ring. He starts crouching low to the ground.

CUT TO:

FLASHBACK May is reading the book we saw her reading at the beginning of this story. A close up on her finger, it’s an engagement ring.

CUT TO:

Robert grasps May’s engagement ring between his fingers. There are tears blossoming in his eyes.

ROBERT
(choked up)
I’m so close, May.

Robert scrambles up and is now looking for more clues.

ROBERT (V.O.)
I should have done this earlier. Looking for clues a whole week after the crime is never any good for the investigation.

A blinking neon sign across the street catches his eye. It’s a bar. Robert swallows deeply.

ROBERT (V.O.)
If May were to fall off the wagon, it would be here. It used to be her bar of choice.

Just as Robert is about to walk across the street to the bar, someone grabs his shoulder.

DRUNKARD THUG 1
Hey, that’s a nice ring you got there.

Robert doesn’t want to deal with this right now.

ROBERT
I don’t want any trouble. This belonged to someone I knew. I’ll give you my wallet, anything. But there’s no way in hell I’m giving you this ring.

More thugs emerge from the shadows.

DRUNKARD THUG 1
You say that ring belonged to someone you knew?

ROBERT
(reaching in his pocket to get his wallet)
Yes I did. Now--
(not bothered)
here’s a hundred bucks. Just take it and go, that’s all the money I have, I promise.

DRUNKARD THUG 1
I don’t want your money.

ROBERT
(beat)
Well I told you, you’re NOT getting the ring.

DRUNKARD THUG 1
She was a nice, good looking girl.

The thugs around him start to chuckle. Robert becomes very tense, becoming fully aware of the situation.

ROBERT
What--

DRUNKARD THUG 1
She stood where we’re standing now for hours, playing with her sobriety chip. Her blonde hair peeking out from under her hood. Lips quivering.

He moves closer to Robert, who is complete stone.

DRUNKARD THUG 1 (cont.)
Eyes watering.

ROBERT
What did you do to her?

The thug leans back from Robert momentarily. He looks around at the crew around him.

DRUNKARD THUG 1
(proud)
We- uh- helped her out, huh boys?

There is a chorus of “YEAH WE DID!” and “OH YEAH”’s from the group of drunks. Robert’s fist starts to clench.

CUT TO:

We can see May standing where Robert and the thugs are standing now. She’s suppressing sobs, her fingers twitching with her poker chip in her hand.

She makes a decision. She stuffs the chip in her pocket and starts walking down the sidewalk, LEAVING the bar.

DRUNKARD THUG 1
Hey sweetheart.

May does a fast turn. She see’s a group of men approaching her and curses herself for not leaving sooner.

DRUNKARD THUG 1 (cont.)
Aw, don’t leave so soon. You have so many treasures.

He eyes her engagement ring. May clutches at it.

MAY
(panicked)
Please-- no! Please, you don’t want this cheap thing.

The group closes in on her.

MAY (cont.)
Please, please no!

May wrenches the ring off the throws it to the ground.

MAY
Just take it! There! Take it!

CUT TO:

Current time. Robert is holding back tears.

ROBERT
(softly)
Why would you do this? She gave you the ring. Why wouldn’t you just take the damn ring?!

DRUNKARD THUG 2
We weren’t after the ring anymore.

He gives Robert a wink.

DRUNKARD THUG 1
Not with her pretty little face.

Something inside Robert snaps. Then suddenly, BAM he’s punching the thug in the face. All the other drunks clammer to him, but Robert is in a rage.

WHOOSH. He dodges punches and kicks, but a few blows land in his stomach and ribs.

The thugs start falling like flies. Finally it’s just Drunkard Thug 1 and Robert standing.

DRUNKARD THUG 1
(amazed)
Did you honestly just take down all my friends?

ROBERT
(sarcastic)
Yeah, looks like it.

DRUNKARD THUG 1
(angry)
Aw man, you’re going to pay for this!

He pulls out a gun. There is no way Robert could fight of a bullet.

ROBERT (V.O.)
If I die now, I’ll be happy. I died in May’s honor. I died knowing the truth.

BAM! A shot rings out, and Robert is flung back by the impact of the bullet right below his right shoulder. Robert falls back in slow motion.

We hear sirens sounding, and policemen shouting.

POLICE
DROP YOUR WEAPON!

The Thug drops his weapon, hands shaking. We see Robert on the ground now. He reaches up and grasps his bullet wound.

ROBERT (V.O.)
I’ll join you, May.

FADE OUT:

MAY (O.S.)
Oh no you don’t.

EXT. A SNOWY PARK- DUSK

Robert snaps his eyes open. He’s laying on a snowy ground. There is no bullet wound, or blood covering him. He’s unscathed. He looks up, and we see May standing over him with her hands in her pockets.

MAY
(cont.)
What are you doing down there?

ROBERT
Dying.

MAY
Robert. Dying, seriously? You were shot in the shoulder, you’ll live.

Robert takes a deep breath. It hurts.

ROBERT
I actually think he got my lung.
(clutches at his chest and breathes)
It hurts.

MAY
Wah wah wah, you baby. Come on.

She reaches her hand out and waits for Robert to grab it. Robert slowly lets his hand falls off of his chest. Then he lets May pull him up.

ROBERT
Argh! Jesus, May. Will you just let me die?

MAY
(appalled)
NO! You’re going to live, Robert. You have to!

ROBERT
WHY?!

MAY
Just because I’m dead doesn’t mean you have to die too! Come on, Robert, stop acting so childish and cliche.
(beat)
Don’t let my death hinder you from being as amazing as you were going to be. If anything, let it propel you forward! Start a cause to stop gang violence or help something to help innocent little women like me who can’t protect themselves. Don’t just quite, Robert. You’re not allowed.

ROBERT
Not allowed?

MAY
No.

ROBERT
No, May, no. You know who wasn’t allowed to just quit? YOU. You shouldn’t have just quit.

MAY
They drowned me, Robert. There wasn’t much I could do about it.

ROBERT
I’M SHOT!

MAY
Yes, but I’m not nearly as strong as you. Robert, this isn’t even a real conversation. You’re making all of this up. Right now, you’re probably in surgery or something, with a bunch of doctors trying to save your life. You dreamt me up to try to give you the inspiration to live. So here I am, Robert. Are you going to listen to yourself, or are you going to give up?

Robert stands still for a moment. There’s a sharp pain in his chest and he reaches up and clutches at it. May eyes him.

MAY
You’re running out of time.

ROBERT
(tears in eyes)
I can’t lose you, May. I just-- it’s too hard.

May walks closer to Robert and wraps her arms around him. Robert is slowly starting to cry harder.

MAY
Robert, I love you.

Robert is now sobbing.

MAY
(cont.)
You did so much for me, when no one else would. And I would have never guessed that I would have fallen in love with you, a man who practically hated me in high school.

ROBERT
(coughs/short laugh)
I wouldn’t say I hated you.

MAY
Well you certainly didn’t like me very much.
(beat)
You’re going to accomplish great things in your life. Let me help you, by letting go of me.

Robert sniffs. He and May are still wrapped in the embrace.

ROBERT
(beat)
Okay. I love you, May.
(shivering)
I’m choosing to live.

He pulls back we see May smile once. She leans in and kisses him passionately on the lips, and then leans back out of the embrace. She begins to wither away in Robert’s arms. He’s crying intensely as it’s happening, but he’s not trying to grab at the dust to get her back. HE’S LETTING GO.

After May has completely dissolved Robert collapses onto his knees. His chest is killing him, literarily. He lays back on his back and clutches at where the bullet wound would be.

DOCTOR (O.S.)
(faintly)
CLEAR!

Robert jolts up off the ground.

ROBERT (V.O.)
This is it.

CUT TO:

INT. HOSPITAL OR

There are multiple doctors surrounding a lifeless Robert who has a tube shoved down his throat. One doctor is massaging his heart while the other has two prongs inside his chest, trying to jolt him back to life.

CUT TO:

EXT. A SNOWY PARK- DUSK

Robert is lying on his back, breathing heavily.

ROBERT (V.O.)
I’m going to live.

CUT TO:

INT. HOSPITAL OR

The doctors are still working on him, trying to revive him.

There’s a MONTAGE of quick cuts between Robert in the park and the OR. When suddenly, there’s a steady heart beat showing on the heart monitor in the OR.

DOCTOR
We’ve got him.

The doctors all exchange quick congrats. You can tell they are smiling underneath their masks. CLOSE UP ON Robert’s unconscious face.

INT. HOSPITAL HALLWAY

Chris is sitting in the waiting room, a nervous wreck. He’s clenching and unclenching his fists. One of the doctors who had been in the OR slowly starts walking out towards Chris. He jumps up.

CHRIS
Oh jesus, what happened? Is he okay?

DOCTOR
(smiles)
He’s going to be fine.

Chris puts a hand over his mouth, trying to be manly and hold back tears. He turns away from the doctor momentarily. After a few paces he turns around to face the doctor again.

CHRIS
Thank you.

CUT TO:

INT. HOSPITAL RECOVERY ROOM

Robert is slowly starting to wake up. Chris is sitting by the bed next to him, half asleep. He jolts up when he see’s Robert waking. He leans in closer.

CHRIS
Rob, you there man?

Robert stirs a little.

CHRIS
(cont.)
Come on, man! Don’t make me wait any longer.

SLOW MOTION CLOSE UP ON HIS EYES Robert opens his eyes.

ROBERT (V.O.)
I’m living--
(beat)
--for me.

FADE OUT.

END.

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I was going to originally make it longer. But as I was writing that part, it just seemed the right way to end. I was thinking that maybe he should wrap things up with Officer Mann, and show him starting off on his successful life, but it just felt RIGHT in that moment.

Now, let's REmix this baby!

:D



Created: Nov 10, 2010

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