Mute

By raymondpg

This is the first and only script I wrote. It is my first stab at writing which enjoy but don't know if I am any goos at. i wrote it a while back and dont know what to think of it. Any helpful tips are of course appreciated. Feel free to take this, flip it, move some stuff around and get crazy with it.



Mute
by Raymond Gonzalez

EXT: COLLEGE CAMPUS. MORNING

GUY walks out of apartment/dorm near campus with backpack. He closes the door behind him and stops. Before proceeding he inserts ear buds into his ears. He continues off down the sidewalk path into campus. GUY walks into campus coffee shop
 
INT: CAMPUS COFFEE SHOP. MORNING

GUY is at counter (just gave order but not heard; inaudible)
 
BARISTA
Alright, one black coffee, that's a dollar twenty
 
GUY hands Barista some change and a one dollar bill. Barista hands GUY cup of coffee.
 
BARISTA
Thanks
 
GUY, with coffee in hand and head down a bit, is stopped immediately by a feminine figure. GUY admires the GIRL from her shoes to her face. LITTLE BOY in GUY clothing is staring up at GIRL with mouth open in awe. The GIRL smiles and giggles a bit at the GUY not being able to say anything or move.
 
GIRL
(SMILING)
Excuse me.
 
GIRL, with a smile, walks around GUY to the counter to place her order. GUY tries to smile a little and play off the embarrassing situation. GUY walks over to table by window and puts coffee down on table. GUY continues to gaze at GIRL from the table. LITTLE BOY smiles and rests his cheek on his fist. He lets out a large sigh.
 
GIRL finishes at the counter and starts for the door, coffee in hand. She exits and GUY quickly gets up, grabs backpack and hurries towards the door to follow. BOY tries to exit but smacks into the closing door.
  
EXT: COLLEGE CAMPUS. MORNING

GUY gets up and walks out of coffee shop. He sees GIRL in the distance putting in ear buds. GIRL starts off down path. GUY follows GIRL keeping his distance trying to get the courage to say something. He gets closer and closer to GIRL. GIRL stops abruptly to fool with iPod. GUY not seeing GIRL stop runs right into GIRL. GIRL falls spilling coffee and dropping IPod. The LITTLE BOY stares at GIRL on ground in shock. The GIRL is now looking up at him a little mad. She picks herself up.
 
GIRL
There goes my coffee…
 
LITTLE BOY picks up her IPod and gives it to her.
 
GIRL
Thanks
 
GIRL wipes dirt off shirt and pants.
 
GIRL
Didn't I just see you in the coffee shop? You’re uh…black coffee…right?
(Waits for an answer)
 
LITTLE BOY stares at GIRL. No motion.
 
GIRL
Yea well…thanks for running into me and…not saying anything. I'm already late for class so I should really get going.
 
LITTLE BOY still staring
 
GIRL
It's been real
 
GIRL turns and walks away into a distant academic building. GUY watches her but then looks around in embarrassment. He then hurries off screen.
 
INT: APARTMENT LIVING ROOM. DAY.

GUY and his roommate are standing in front of the television in their apartment/dorm with WII controllers in hand, each punching at the screen vigorously. The screen shows a boxing game as each are trying to fight the other. They are talking while playing the game.
 
ROOMMATE
So, you stood there and stared at her. No, no, gawked at her after you pushed her down and spilled her coffee…
 
GUY continues to play but nods in embarrassment.
 
ROOMMATE
Maybe you need to go to the bathroom…
 
GUY looks at roommate confused
 
ROOMMATE
Yea, I thought you might want some privacy while you looked for your manhood…
.(LAUGHS)
I'm serious. You can’t even talk to a GIRL. Instead, you push them down and take their coffee
(LAUGHS AGAIN)
Seriously though, quit talking about it and do something…
 
GUY angrily gives one last hard punch at the screen knocking out his roommate's character in the boxing game.
 
INT: CAMPUS COFEE SHOP.MORNING.
GUY sits at a table in campus coffee shop reading a book and waiting for the GIRL. GIRL walks into coffee shop and orders coffee. GUY tries to adjust himself to look cool. GIRL pays him no mind. GIRL thanks Barista and heads for the door. GUY quickly stands up and runs over to cut her off before she reaches the door. GUY steps in front of GIRL, stopping her in her tracks.
 
GIRL
(Shaken up)
Holy crap man, you know, you COULD just tap me on the shoulder or say hi. You don't have to keep popping out of nowhere.
 
LITTLE BOY stands in front of GIRL trying to move mouth but not saying anything.
 
GIRL
Are you mute?
 
LITTLE BOY stares for a few seconds, then runs out the door.
 
GIRL
Seriously? Did that just happen?
 
INT: DIVE BAR.NIGHT.
GUY and ROOMATE are sitting across from each other at a booth in an old bar. Music is in the background and a crowd of college kids are around. Both have a mug of beer in front of them.
 
ROOMMATE
(LAUGHS)
The GIRL you have been talking about asked you if you were mute. You can't make this stuff up.
(LAUGHS)
I just don't get it, you get the chance to talk to this GIRL you have been pining over and you ran? You didn't even walk away…you ran. You know you’re hopeless right?
 
GUY downs his beer and stares at his roommate disappointedly, shaking his head.
 
EXT: ON CAMPUS STEPS NEAR ACADEMIC BUILDING.DAY.
 GUY is sitting on steps of a building looking at the building in the distance. He knows the building is the one the GIRL has class in. He looks nervous. LITTLE BOY sits with head on both hands, looking down then looking back up toward the building. LITTLE BOY takes a deep breath, stands up and starts toward the building. The GUY walks fast towards the building, goes up the stairs and enters the academic building the GIRL is having class in.
 
INT: ACADEMIC BUILDING.DAY.
 GUY runs through building passing people looking in every class door window searching for the GIRL. No luck downstairs so the GUY goes to the upstairs continuing his search. GUY passes an open door and comes back to it. In the back of the classroom the GIRL sits talking notes. GUY stares for a bit and enters the room, confidently. Professor who is lecturing stops for a second
 
PROFESSOR
(in the background)
Excuse me can I help you with something. I'm in the middle of a class. If you are not in this class please leave (continues to ramble)
 
GUY is not fazed by the staring classroom or the upset professor. The GUY heads straight toward the back of the classroom directly toward the GIRL. GIRL looks around confused. The GUY walks right up to the GIRL'S desk and grabs her hand from off the desk.
 
GIRL
Um. Uh
 
GUY takes a big gulp and…
 
GUY
Hi
 
SCREEN GOES BLACK
 
ALT ENDING

GUY opens mouth to talk


SCREEN GOES BLACK

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Created: Jan 08, 2010

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